Remembering Summer Love

Wow, Saffie - you're practically making a grown man cry with this one. What a heart wrenching effort. "Taking our secrets and safe-guarding them in the sea" What a beautiful line! A lot of pain in this poem, but conveyed brilliantly.

This is a beautifully written poem, Saffie! I hope it is an actual memory that you can hold in your heart forever!

Because you write about him a lot, always starting off in the most uplifting and loving terms, I would like to see you write these poems without the very sad endings! I know it still hurts, and the sad part is how you feel when you are dreaming or alone, but writing about your memories of him in positive terms only might allow you to re-read them when you feel bad about his loss, and help you deal with the more negative outcomes you experience?

A stunning poem though! Really enjoyed it!

I know I shouldnt say this, but I relate to this piece all too well, whether it's your story or someone else's. It is very well written and I love how each of the beginning stanzas is another way of describing the night that meant so much to you (or your character) depending on how you wrote this. I love the style choice and how you did end up describing everything at the beginning so completely thoroughly. Very, very well written.