by BlueJay
I know I shouldnt say this, but I relate to this piece all too well, whether it's your story or someone else's. It is very well written and I love how each of the beginning stanzas is another way of describing the night that meant so much to you (or your character) depending on how you wrote this. I love the style choice and how you did end up describing everything at the beginning so completely thoroughly. Very, very well written. |
by Zabadak
This is a beautifully written poem, Saffie! I hope it is an actual memory that you can hold in your heart forever! |
by Ben Pickard
Wow, Saffie - you're practically making a grown man cry with this one. What a heart wrenching effort. "Taking our secrets and safe-guarding them in the sea" What a beautiful line! A lot of pain in this poem, but conveyed brilliantly. |