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Love the simple rhyming within this poem saffie. You did a great job to make the poem flow so smoothly. The content of the poem is sad though. Through your eyes I see you crying while this person has left you in death or physically. Either way you captured the emotions of the readers hearts. The fears of any heart can come true. You don't want to believe it because love is a powerful force that can block out any other emotion that we feel. I liked this for it's short beautiful message, about love and how complicated emotions can be when you have to live through them. 5/5

Wow! This is such powerful imagery in such a short poem! Professional quality...and don't you dare argue against that statement! It is very sad but I love it!

A heart I used to know
lies broken on the ground,
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The loss of your own heart, love is very painful and I like the way you could get it on paper.

searching for its freedom
which never could be found.
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It has lost it's freedom for it's now bound to the person who broke it like so true!

Drowning in a puddle
that integrates its tears,
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It's tired of and from crying so lie it lies in it's own tears,the only thing that is it's.

this heart becomes dissolved
amongst its deepest fears.
I love the ending using it's tears as it's deepest dears.Brilliant!