The Wait

Good poem this is! Yes, it's true that loving couple can't live away from each other. And you are talking about 1600 miles. That's really a very long distance.

But the best thing I found in this write that even if she is very far from you, you are still holding her hand. It's not like, that you are going for any other girl who is very close to you of lives near to you. Yes, very soon the distance will be shortened.

I like the third line - the camera and pixels on a screen do their best to lessen the pain,

Nicely done..... Keep on writing.

I liked this little piece, distance is hard to cope with, especially from those we love, and those we feel are the other half of us. I could relate tot his poem, it is not easy being away from our loved ones. I also like how you mention the camera, and how it can somewhat lessen the pain, but then also can add to the pain because it can make you miss them more, and remind you that you cannot be with them and hold them.

Sweet write, and I like the hopeful ending which implies that things are about to change and you might get a chance at being with this person very soon?

I think your title choice is actually quite good too - it puts emphasis on the fact you are waiting to be with this person.

I love the way you pour your heart out in this one... it is a nice touch and the distance part like number wise makes me laugh that you remember it. Anyway, well written. I like this one :P