Gone Forever!

by uttAm   Dec 31, 2014


Your body is frail and sketched with wrinkles,
and you are suffocatingly
counting your last breaths today,
amidst of all those celebrations
which already started as your funeral.
The dawn of tomorrow
will no more gleam your visage
and the calm wind
will no more sing carols for you,
but instead it wil be,
for the naive peer of yours.
There will be also
some like me,
who will mourn by your bier
and always acknowledge the experiences received from you,
but all our laments will go unlistened,
since by then you will have ears in vain;
you will be gone;
gone forever---
"Twenty Fourteen"

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  • 9 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    The creativity of this piece caught my attention after I read it the first time. The way it leads you into a false start of thinking the poem is about a person, but the twist comes when you realise it is about the last year passing by. I thought the poem was well constructed. A dedication to saying goodbye to 2014!

  • 9 years ago

    by GB

    I like your start and despite the random length of this verse , it still can read fluently making the reader more excited to see how it ends.

    Some unnecessary words could be omitted without losing any thing, check this:
    ~Your body is frail and sketched with wrinkles,
    and you are suffocatingly
    --------> Your body is frail, sketched with wrinkles,
    you are suffocatingly
    counting your last breaths today,

    You used interesting vocabularies which was very refreshing and enriched the piece so much.
    I like the closure as well, very well description for 2014.

    Happy new year and congrats.
    Write on~

  • 9 years ago

    by alka mendiratta

    Congrats on the win:)

  • 9 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    What a heart felt way to bid the year 2014 goodbye! You have turned the year into a living being who has provided each one of us with lessons, memories and moments-some good and some bad. Nicely penned.

    Congrats on the win!

  • 9 years ago

    by gumshuda

    On wow..
    Congratulations uttam. :-)

    You have A new year gift. :-P

    • 9 years ago

      by uttAm

      I couldn't have expect much more better gift than this...:)

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