Comments : Not My Time

  • 9 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    This poem does an excellent job in pulling the reader into the scene. You take death in the first line and make the poem about surviving. you worry the reader into thinking you will not survive and the eerie feeling you portray is great. Its like a heart sinking moment in time. I am glad in the next stanza you write about what happened and you being trapped inside a car, but leave the reader guessing into who caused the accident and if you were the only one in the car. This person is religious and prays to god to help them through all this and stay sane or even alive. Faces of strangers show no concern to you, and they are just there because it was a curiosity to see something enthralling. But once you heard the sirens you knew you were safe and sound, and just as you were fading out you heard someone say you are not going to die today. This poem really does grip you from the beginning to end and proves that in your mind god talked to you and kept you safe. 5/5