by John Doe Jan 8, 2015
category :
Fun, humor /
about society
As I walked home, |
While I enjoyed it Mihir, I think you did your job right as a poet, there some bumps in the flow but it was quite nice to read. It made me laugh and I needed that so it was in the right catagory, what I didn't like was that at times (for me) it was kind of forced? I don't really know right now I"m getting sick again (unfortunatly). Really nice poem 5/5 |
by John Doe
Yes I agree it isn't very smooth but I felt the pun may make up for it, but now that I have got the confidence that I can write humor I'll improve the structure of my poems to come. Thank you for reading it though!! |
by John Doe
Yes I agree it isn't very smooth but I felt the pun may make up for it, but now that I have got the confidence that I can write humor I'll improve the structure of my poems to come. Thank you for reading it though!! |
by Sunshine
Lol the best part was the store for me, I think you did really well in that part. |
by John Doe
Thank you and now that you've shown it I see it actually works better! |