Living Memories (String Senryu)

This is a beautifully wistful and well written piece, Hellon. And what a lovely final stanza. Excellent work.

Judging Comment:

This piece by Hellon is brilliant!

Senryu poems are a bit tricky to write because of the shirt length of the poem and syllable restrictions.. ...getting the message across is difficult, Hellon masters this form.

The beauty of summer, such innocence, the nature tones alone are so captivating. The visual display leaves me speechless. To go from swim suit to ah natural.... Breathtaking!

And now, I take it a step further, because for me personally,I'm reading a deeper message here.

Letting go of insecurity and embracing life to its fullest!
This senryu is very inspirational, powerful, and spirited.

A joy to read prof. You are always shining in your haikus and senryu poems.The four images in the four pieces made me eager for summer to come ~winks

Adorable writing.

This is a cute poem hellon. There are definitely some clever and humorous lines here, especially the last stanza, I loved the vivid imagery within this as well, because it grips you and pulls you into what you are seeing as the author. There is a blissful caution to what you are feeling in the first line and it is clever. Skinny dipping if you dare, I love that. Its almost like you are daring yourself or others into doing it. The second stanza holds great imagery as well, while the sand is in between your toes, curling and remising on past memories of this beach. The beach is empty, but the lines after that tell me its in the day time but it is a risk, that of course you end up taking. But you feel confident in what you did. I love this poem hon, great lines and wording. 5/5