Comments : Jessy - a friend I had

  • 9 years ago

    by alka mendiratta

    Nicely penned :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    What a beautiful dedication to the girl you used to know although I feel that possibly you are still friends but you are just talking of the times you had before.

    Innocence and childhood are rare my friend
    It's a balance fragile and new
    It's a space where every child is born
    That's were Jessy and I grew.
    ^^
    This stanza is so pure. Children are so innocent aren't they? The way you describe the friendship here is beautiful. I feel the 'were' on the last penultimate line should be 'where' though

    Em

  • 8 years ago

    by Khadz

    Lovely well done..