by Baby Rainbow
I enjoyed this, I like how you kept the wording simple, like speech, and did not focus too much on the grammar. To me it felt more natural. For example, when you said, "move forward man" - this line really made me feel like you were talking to me personally, face to face. It made your words seem more natural. Sometimes this doesn't work in poetry but I felt in this case that it did. I liked the layout of your poem, with the two lines stanzas, it really captured the flow, and the rhythm that you created. |
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by Maple Tree
Well written !!! |
Thank u so much! |