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by Mark Spencer Feb 1, 2015 category : Life, society / other
Doctor Dangerous By Mark Spencer I used to dream that I was A mighty superhero, A fantasy that helped me Decide I'm not a zero. But who knew, As I grew, I'd believe it? And many superheroes Have to face their nemesis. Mine was a nasty villain Known as Doctor Dangerous. And he knew, As time flew, I would leave it. 'Cause childhood fantasies, they Never stay until the end. When we become adults, we Make believe they're just pretend. But dreams of superheroes Shape how we see ourselves, and Sometimes it gives us courage To rise up and take a stand. If we're true, To our view, We'll receive it. But childhood fantasies, they Never stay until the end. When we become adults, we Make believe they're just pretend. But doesn't everybody Have their Doctor Dangerous, Who tries to stop the hero From becoming a success? But he'll lose, If you choose, To achieve it. I used to dream that I was A mighty superhero, A fantasy that helped me Decide I'm not a zero. And who knew, As I grew, I'd believe it?
by IdTakeABulletForYou
I just have a small grammatical correction: But he'll lose, If you choose, To achieve it. I belive that there should be no comma after "choose". It would be a bit more powerful that way, as well as more proper for the sentence. Other than that, a very enjoyable read. I'd actually be intrigued if you made this into a super hero poem saga. It has that potential. 5/5 V/r IdTakeABulletForYou (Stephen)