In the emptiness of life
My heart sadly lives
In the tip of a knife
^^These lines shows the reader the agony/pain you are standing upon. Life's been placed on the tip of a knife and one false move it can rip it or end it! A delicate situation is presented here to the reader.
My thoughts weaves
Broken from the bottom
^^It will be better to remove the "s" from the word weaves and place a comma after it so it will read smoothly.
Into million of pieces I shutter
^^Did you mean shatter...?
And the future is mine to curve
^^I was thinking about this line. Did you mean "the future is mine to carve" You have used the word curve and that gave me a picture of how its in your hands on what the future should be. Its your decision, its your life.
In thy presence I will kneel
My heart please fill with love.
^^The ending here portrays how you yearn to see, help and look upon others with love so you can help them-at least that is what I feel with this line.
All in all a very delicate, touching write filled with a sadness that cannot be healed...take care.