Comments : Reverie (Sijo)

  • 9 years ago

    by Sunshine

    You will always leave me speechless with your form poetry, we have to talk again about forms lol!
    I'm overwhelmed by the beauty of these 3 lines, they are absolutely priceless!

    Your title, a path to your own imagination you know!
    the womb of oblivion ..such a strong metaphor! Granting these divine kisses such a harmony as if they are all there locked in your subconsciousness.

    Seeking a shield from your own madness in observing him, as if he takes you to a different world.

    It's like you're literally mesmerized.
    Well so am I, by this poem!

    Art ! Pure art.

    • 9 years ago

      by GB

      You know what, I'm glad someone understood this piece very well :)

  • 9 years ago

    by Sunshine

    Oohhh :) Glad to hear! I hate to ramble on someone's poem and disappoint them with my analysis. <3

  • 9 years ago

    by Robert Gardiner

    Nicely Done, Kudos!!!

  • 9 years ago

    by PorcelainMoon

    I think the closing line wrapped this up nicely, with a bow. But the first line I think detracts from this write a little. Only because the other lines are incredible. A very fun poem to read aloud. Great work GB

  • 9 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Dear Samia,

    Your poem is a gentle and female tribute to once-in-a-lifetime Love.
    Only when we truly and deeply love do we feel the need to stay focussed on the other, both mentally and physically and drink in the wonder or who they are.

    A famous female mystic said that we do not open our eyes to reality over time with regards to the love we hold for the other, but we start to gradually fail to see the magic in them. I tend to agree:)

    Well done:) xx Ingrid

  • 9 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    :O0

    Oh My,

    Ummmmmm.....This ....Ummmmmm....this is Amazing!!!!!!!!!! this form is new to me but i have to say you have written this so flawlessly i am in awe......just WOW!

    Saved to favourites.......just epic. :))))