If Religion

by Sunshine   Feb 8, 2015


Humans;

If religion is of naked deeds
sculptured abruptly on a chandelier;
a shower of lie-drops and an umbrella,
thus rain-phobics have zilch to fear.

If religion is of holly seeds,
blooming from a bottomless sphere,
a shower of truth-drops and no umbrella,
thus sun-devotees have zilch to fear.

**

The faith you condemn guilty is but void,
if it's science that brought us near.
Yet it's your guilt that you avoid,
if it's the Lord who brought us here.

How would an un-existing God
silence the chaos that you hear?
Oh man of earth, what an odd,
so shameful and insincere!

by: Rania Moallem

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  • 9 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    This poem is so creative and the wording is very impressive. I find it so refreshing and unique and something that really stands out this week above the rest. I think the poet has found a good rhythm and has structured the poem well. It is a very though-provoking poem which makes the reader ponder on life, religion and the world as it stands. The questions come across as directed towards the reader themselves, and it really pulls the reader in. Great poem!

  • 9 years ago

    by Derrick Williams

    GREAT POEM!!

  • 9 years ago

    by Abed

    Congrats, I love the concept.
    what's zilch? :O

    • 9 years ago

      by Sunshine

      ZERO, nothing at all,

      and thank you <3

  • 9 years ago

    by Karla

    Congrats Nana. it's beautiful!

  • 9 years ago

    by GB

    Congratulations, Nana, indeed a very distinctive writing.
    Let's put the concept of the poem aside and highlights some of the poetic skills used.

    Starting the piece and directing the speech using the word "Humans" and semicolon was very smart beginning to draw the attention of the readers, the conditional "if" as well at the start of each stanza made me ponder and read this part several times before moving to the next parts, just replacing few words with respect to the last two lines changed the meaning completely, very nicely penned.

    I think the second part of the poem is easier to understand, your rhyming is as smooth as the glass and the closure was so perfect for such thought provoking read.

    One more thing to mention, the word "Zilch" is very unusual to read in the poems of these day, how did it cross your mind :)

    • 9 years ago

      by Sunshine

      Aww thank you GB, if it wasn't for your comment I wouldn't have noticed that it won yet :P , your comment is really appreciated, the word Zilch is a word I used in a couple of my poems in the past, it's also my whatsapp status, I really have to reconsider my "relationship" with that word lol

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