Comments : Hole-House Peace

  • 9 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    Vey nice free flow with a unique approach to the reverse of making a mountain out of an ant hill . Also reinforcing my feeling that religion is not the issue rather a natural desire to overcome by virtue rather than vice
    If that makes sense ;)

    Ants are actually social creatures
    a wasp is the air force of army ants lol

    • 9 years ago

      by Sunshine

      HAHAHA all thanks to your poem, Mikey :P

  • 9 years ago

    by Kristen

    Don't we all wish we were someone else? :).

    This is a nice free flow but it does have some kind of strong message within. I do like your first stanza because of the impact it does have on the reader, it can go by a lot of things. As in, in this world don't we all feel small and shadow like as humans? It does put some thought into our heads that we are only as important to the people who care as we are to them. Beneath something somewhere you are safe, just hiding, but who are we hiding from, just the world in general? But isn't that death? I do LOVE the comparison to the ant though they are tiny little creatures that we often overlook in our everyday summer lives. So it loops around back to the beginning and end where we feel safest in our own minds. We feel overlooked just Luke the ant to us humans, well crafted and thought provoking write!

  • 9 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    I got halfway through this and thought to myself "oh, to be such a creature as that" - the luxury! And then you said the same thing in the poem! "How I wish I was an insignificant ant". To be so hidden and free from it all!
    All the best,
    Ben