Comments : Rotten fruit

  • 9 years ago

    by Azrael

    Very raw emotions in this piece, i enjoyed it.

  • 9 years ago

    by Mello193

    Indeed as Azrael said, raw emotions were plenty. This poem is one of the funner ones i've read today. I like the way you change perspectives. the only issue with that overall is in the third stanza, you change harshly from first perspective to third. The imagining was profoundly sad, but the last stanza is very beautiful and inspiring. Good first piece to post.