The Empty Classroom - Senryu

I am supposed to be sitting in class right now, so let me also say you have most definitely captured this moment in an amazing way. Spot on format as well.

Great little write :)

This is an excellent rendition of a senryu. It has everything a senryu needs, the syllable count is spot on and the emotion is hidden but there. I find it interesting how a lot of people in short poetry make the poem just fit the count and not pay attention to imagery or feeling, I feel you have done both well here. The line can be really seen in two points of view, as in the clocks view, one that it always ticks,and what I believe you were going for in the poem which is the students view is is of anxious and annoyance. It is almost actually is a count down until the end of school. I like how you tied in the title as well, they are waiting to be released, and the title is in future tense, very clever on your part. The last line ties the story together and I.can see two different pictures in my mind, the clock and then it pans over the classroom with all the restless students. Great write overall. 5/5

Neat senryu! I liked how you personified the clock, it being faithful to time. I don't think I've read "splinter" in a poem where it was used by a verb and it creates a sharp image to the poem. I was a bit surprised that you described the silence as patient, as I sometimes think of silence as being tense or unruly. But the image of the empty classroom, finally free from having to tame the students, the image of summer even, is quite encouraging near the end.

I am still a student so I love this too :p

I love your haiku
reminds me of my classmate days
do good work you do