In the World that's Full of Faults

You have an interesting poem here...I was interested to see if this poem was plagiarized or something, and I found out that this poem was on another poetry site. However, I noticed that the profile picture is the same as the one you have now, so I am guessing that this one is yours and you just thought to upload it to another site. I don't really know why I am mentioning this, but I just thought I should.

Anyway, I have a few recommendations for this. I noticed that in some of them you had rhyme schemes and in some you didn't. I don't know if you thought that some of the words rhymed, or if you just decided to write it that way. I also think that it would be good if you used punctuation in this piece, such as periods and commas. Sometimes that affects your poems too, because the reader might not know how to actually read the poem.

In the world that's full of faults
And tattered souls washed with salts
No wonder people refused to hold
The light that everyone should mold

^ In this stanza, I would make it so that the first verse says "In a world..." instead of "In the world..." My favorite part of this stanza is the second verse, "And tattered souls washed with salts." I thought this was a very creative verse, because I know that sometimes salt is used to cause more pain to a wound. Very beautiful beginning.

The promise and promises that you've imprinted
Still burning with anticipation in my head
I've tried to find the goods till the end
But there are things we shouldn't held

^ The word 'held' at the end should probably be 'hold,' because you have been writing in past tense, or I might be wrong about this because I am not that good with english :/

Now here in darkness they have no clue
Hands were coated with sins too
Still and cold, my heart's with you
Forever we'll live in the world, I only knew

^ I thought this was a beautiful ending. I really loved it, especially the third and fourth lines. It kind of made it feel like the narrator was still in love with the person, even though a lot of things have happened. It kind of gives off a feeling of hope.

This is a poem that has a lot of potential, it just needs a little bit of work.

Beautiful

~S