Pass present to Future

This is a delicate piece of poetry, beautifully written.

SL

From sadness and pain of a lost love to a strong and made up mind of a heart that never wants to remember a false love. Each stanza holds memories and the sadness is felt and your voice is vibrant throughout the write...touching.

Hope all is well with you...take care.

Dried upon my face
these memories remain...
like a whisper in a crowd
you cling to the air in my lungs

^ I love this stanza, you were able to establish a clear, unique voice and capture the full attention of a reader. I especially love the third and fourth lines, there's just something about them that enticed me - inspired me. Plus they help create your tone just a little bit as well. Great introductory stanza.

let me breathe--

^ This is a wonderfully done transition. I love the style it gives the piece, especially when the format gets repeated later on.

Suffocate? No communicate with
the language you babbled into
my heart years ago.
Scribble me more love notes..please
I'm still that hopeless girl
looking for my lover's arms

^ And now we get to the heart of the piece, the story begins to unfold and now the tone is fully established alongside a beautiful sense of emotional imagery, something so easy to do but rarely created so beautifully.

Falling from my thoughts
these memories become lost
like shadows hanging against the moon
you cease to exist

^ I feel like this stanza needs some sort of punctuation somewhere since every other stanza does. Maybe something after the third line? Otherwise this one left me speechless.

let me forget you--

^ I have pretty much already explained this one and how it adds life to the piece, but I especially like how you changed the wording.

Suffer? No discover the
remnants of a shattered atmosphere
we called our world.
Design me another universe..please
I'm no longer that hopeless girl
longing for a liar's charm.

^ Woah, so your use of a single word question throughout the piece is interesting. IT keeps up your sense of voice and poetic style. Again, your descriptions are phenomenal. Beautiful ending, I love how you were able to show so much growth within the piece, while still making it coherent and well worth the read.

Great job :)

Nice to see you here again!
I like the subtle development here through the verses, from nostalgia during heartfelt loneliness to the alternative of giving up and finally to stating the imperative that a new, interdependent relationship must be built. Beautiful expression of maturation and accepting the possibility of splitting, even though painful, if matters are not set right.