It's hard when your life is being controlled by someone and you can't breathe already because of the demands. It's hard when you are being dictated and you can't already not breathe, you are chained, and you can't do anything about it but to find another chance to survive a day. You just want to break free from everything. I love the darkness in this write and how it is sustained to the very last words. Most dark poems I've read use deep and critical words, but you use words that are not that simple and not that deep, but it doesn't sacrifice the darkness in this write. The message of this piece is already dark itself. The title reminds me of the Anime/Manga 'Black Butler' and in the whole course of reading this poem that was on my mind,. Haha .. You did a great job here (: |
by Meme
Thanks :) |
by Baby Rainbow
Wow Meme, I can totally understand this poem and get my head right into this. I understand what each line is saying, and I can feel the emotion behind the words too, I love how you narrated it to a person, and it seems directed at them in a way that you know you are not brave enough to direct it to them face to face. |
by Meme
Thanks a lot Saff :) |
by Ben Pickard
The last stanza in this piece is hugely powerful. Very dark poem that deals with an important topic that so many can relate to. 5 from me! |