Mori,

May the answer to your prayers bring peace and security to your heart.
You are young, beautiful and smart, I know very well the kind of life and love waiting for you :)
Very beautifully penned.

May all your prayers and wishes cone true, Mori-san (: I love the honest thoughts poured in every word in this piece, it shows your courage, persistence, dedication, and how smart and strong you are (: Nicely done (:

PS. Can't get over with the necklace (: Haha ..

--- MKKK

"God I know that you didn't intent for
me to dine my own heart out,
yet I did as everything that I held dear to me
vanished into the mists of forgotten memories."

- First line: Put a comma after "God", also "intent" should be "intend"

- Second line: interesting choice of words. I like how you used "dine" here. Also, don't think you need the word "own".

- Third line: Re-read or re-phrase?

- Fourth line: I liked reading "vanished" but "forgotten memories" seemed a bit cliche.

"I am a soldier with battle scars that no one truly knows.
Holding onto a smile that's faker,
than my laugh when things go horribly wrong."

- Think this stanza could use some work. Simply my humble opinion though. I liked where you're going with the metaphor. You could even write, "I, a soldier with hidden battle scars" so it's not so verbose. I would suggest placing a comma instead of a period of the first line, then deleting the comma after "faker".

- I think you could write something stronger than "faker". "Holding onto a smile to disguise the pain" or something. "things go wrong" is just too vague in my opinion. Could be stronger.

"I'm a vixen queen, but that doesn't mean that I won't
bow down to fate when the gig is up."

- I wasn't a fan of the wording, but this is where your voice and style shine through. I just think after writing of being a soldier, etc, "the gig is up" kind of over simplifies your struggle or what you're going through.

"I'm praying now, as I never truly before did."
- Beautiful, honest line.

"All I want is a way for redemption to come to my aid;"

- I still think this could be shortened a bit. Like "All I want is redemption's mighty aid" or something like that.

"for an angel to guide me through the darkness of
this bottomless pit of a heart."

- Your prayer and yearning here is earnest. I think we all want an angel or some guardian to help us find the light and find ourselves at some point. I wasn't too keen on "of this bottomless pit of a heart" because it sounded too wordy.

"Whatever it takes I want to find a way out
even if I have to go down on my knees and
swallow my pride for a third chance; for
my heart to become filled with love, rather
than stay in a constant loop filled with misery."

- I thought this was a strong finish and your voice is clear here. It's humble and wanting to accept and return that love. I think sometimes we have to let go and surrender, let go of that control in order to learn and grow.

- For "go down on my knee", you could use "genuflect" or a synonym. "go down" seems like a filler here.

- I would suggest in the last line, using a stronger word than "filled" since you already used it in the previous one.

Take care.

Very well written personal prayer poem

"........you didn't intend for me to dine my own heart out" - brilliant.
A truly moving piece,
Take care,
Ben