Lay Me Down

This is the 15th poem from your latest :P

Take down my dream-catcher and give it away,

^ I love the way you used this line to pull in the audience. I love that it shows change but it does not give away what the story line is, what the change is, or the tone. Its one of those lines that captivates and remains with the reader long after they finish reading the piece. I love it.

for I am now sleeping in Heavenly peace,
in a place where nightmares have ceased.

^ I like the rhyme scheme and rhythm between these lines and how they make this first stanza truly pop. To me it seems like a lot of your poems have sad undertones, this one is no exception, but each piece is getting more and more beautiful in that sense.

Lay me down to rest,
and whisper your goodbyes,
let the music box play memories
of the life I used to have.

^ I really like the flow of this stanza. It is one beautifully placed sentence and I love the way each line just adds a new (more defining) personality to this piece and the feelings associated with it. I think that the idea of music boxes faded out a long time ago, that their significance and beauty has been forgotten or neglected far too easily, so I love the fact you used it here and allowed it to carry on its significance.

Lay me down and let me go,
it's time for me to fly back home.

^ I love the elegance of this stanza, even if it is a tad on the edge of being cliche' it is still very well utilized in this piece. The notion of laying a person down and "letting go" or being able to move on, to detach yourself from them and the memories you have with them, while knowing full well that it is one of the most difficult aspects of life, is something so difficult so the use of juxtaposition here is a nice little touch as well.

Dry your eyes and try to smile,
for I finally found freedom
as I soar towards the sky.

^ This makes me think that this poem was from someone like an older sibling or parent written to reassure the younger one that there is nothing to be worried about. It makes the piece more comforting to read, and a lot less painful.

All in all, excellently penned Saffie. I really like this one.

Take down my dream-catcher and give it away,
for I am now sleeping in Heavenly peace,
in a place where nightmares have ceased.

^ I love this Saffie, There is a darkness and hopefulness to the way you worded this. It is clear this person has a dream catcher, maybe for good luck or to attest to the past they have been having nightmares about. But now you are feeling more peaceful and you have gone to a happier place in your mind and soul, that place where no one can hurt you or tell you wrong.

Lay me down to rest,
and whisper your goodbyes,
let the music box play memories
of the life I used to have.

^ Beautiful wording and imagery here as well. It seems like this person is dying and they want to have their final rest in peace, I love the word whispers here as well, because to me it adds a lot to the poem. This poem as a serene feeling and inside the characters mind you want to keep it that way. it is interesting perspective to show the emotions of one character and play it out. THe music box seems to be a thing you hold onto dearly with great memories of youth.

Lay me down and let me go,
it's time for me to fly back home.

Dry your eyes and try to smile,
for I finally found freedom
as I soar towards the sky.

^ It seems what you are saying here is that you are going home into the clouds, maybe pertaining to heaven or becoming an angel. It is also like you are saying, don't worry about me because I am finally free from all of this pain I have lived in. I love this poem though, It sheds a peaceful life on death. 5/5