Baby's first cry (Katauta)

by GB   Apr 22, 2015


Baby's first cry

Unto salvation,
screams to snatch life from within

the warrior of the murk.

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** Katauta, an ancient Japanese 3 line form that is found in the Man'yoshu. The katauta can either stand by itself or form a stanza in something longer, the line length count is 5-7-7.

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  • 8 years ago

    by Mortal Utopia

    Really nice! Great job!

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    This is beautiful and brought a tear to my eye. You captured so much is so few lines, well done.

    Em

  • 9 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Love this write :) i am very fond of this forn too ive played with it myself but i like this better lol

  • 9 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    What a clever little piece. Well written.

  • 9 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Dear Samia,

    The process of being born is the ultimate battle to the baby and you captured that so well in your poem. So many die in the process of exiting the womb, for so many different reasons. They are indeed brave little soldiers:)
    My boy almost died as well, he came out of the womb all blue and with an Apgar score of 1. You would not tell, though, if you looked at him now!
    I hope you will have a child as well, as I just know it would have the best mum ever:)

    Take care, dear lady,

    much love xx Ingrid

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