I Bet My Life

Powerful poem, Saffie! Don't know whether this relates to you, or whether it is a fictitious write, but either way, it is very sad to have to live with such heartache.

The poem is, as is becoming usual for you, excellent! I particularly like the "bet my life" statement which appears throughout, possibly risking all because you know that you cannot lose the bet? I also like the metaphoric use of the "plastic spoon" to indicate the ease with which the mentioned promises are broken.

I question why the writer/character has to be forgiven, unless we are only being given one side of the story, but I would argue that with what is given, the writer/ character broke off the relationship because of the many broken promises (continue to make promises you will break like a plastic spoon) but struggles with what had to be done practically, with what is really wanted emotionally? A mystery? I would be interested to know the whole story, Saffie!

I bet my life that there is nothing I can do
to make you love me again,
nothing I can say to make you forgive me.

I bet my life that you will read this poem
and never know that it's about you.

^ Oh this is so sad, I like you that you use the refrain "I bet my life". because you know this person will never do something like read this poem. There are feelings of heavy remorse that linger within your heart and soul. It does make me as the reader interested because you left it vague. we don't know who this person is and all we can do is imagine. This kind of looks like you are writing to this person and asking for forgiveness, about something else that is vague, which again I love. It makes us more interested about the rest of the poem and makes our minds think about or guess what could be next.

I bet my life that you will continue
to make promises you will break like a plastic spoon;
I know you will never stay with me
for as long as I want you to.

I bet my life that you will never love me again,
the way I know you used to.

^Oh this is also extremely sad. I do like the analogy about the plastic spoon, because trust can be broken that easily. and when trust is broke, I think we all know how difficult it is to get back. These promises are hard to deal with because we are often so innocent that we do not think that anyone could lie, and when they do, it hurts us more than anyone thinks they know. anyway This is such a powerful shgort poem Saffie. 5/5