Wow, this is deep, but amazing.

I think it holds a lot of pain in it. I know it is old, but I don't think I remember this one.

I like the flow you kept to it, the pace and the rhyme, it all worked well together, and I think kept it short and sweet for such a painful poem. I also think the pace of the poem relates well to the thoughts of someone who is in this situation, as sometimes suicidal thoughts and actions happen this fast, and there is not much thinking done.

I think the poem shows a lot of inner pain inside the character, and then some desperation for the pain to go away.

your ending is so impactful, really leaves a heavy feeling to end with, knowing the character has taken this route. It is a sound in which if witnessed/heard, will never be forgotten.

Powerful write

Linda this is so beautiful and I just want you to know ho happy I am to see you back. Keep writing with the great force that you do.

Wow - this hits you between the eyes. Really good. Agree with Baby, the end is excellent for this poem. Well written.