Oh damn it I can so relate to this piece my sweet.... I felt this way years ago.... Sometimes, all it takes is an army of one.... I won my battle, so did my hubby, gigggggles...

Love this piece!

<3

Meme, as always I really enjoy reading your poetry. There's something about your writing that not only draws me in but makes me feel every emotion you portray.

I really love the imagery you created in this poem and your word choice was spot on. The first two stanzas were my favorite - I like how you described this person as hiding behind wall of doubt and how you continuously fight to see the real him.

Really enjoyed this poem! Well done <3

ER MEE GERSH THIS IS AWESOME!!! TOTALLY RELATABLE!!

ER MEE GERSH THIS IS AWESOME!!! TOTALLY RELATABLE!!

Not even gonna break it down, you are awesome, this poem is awesome, nominated...that is all.

Meme, your words ring with so much truth. I can especially relate to the other character you are talking to. A lot of times it is difficult to open up to a person we love because of past hurt and pain. We fight but sometimes it is not enough and it is tiring to keep fighting because of depression. Anyways thank you for sharing this as it is relatable. 5/5

This poem gives me pause. On the one hand it is beautiful in its depiction of trying to pry the other from his protective shell, his "castle / just for one." In doing so the poem is remarkable in its imagery (" trapped in / the middle of a / place that echoes / nothing but your / silence"). On the other hand, it is also so full of foreboding (" But are / you even real?") that I wonder if it's ever going to be worth the while to go through these heroics. (Contest Comment)

Judging Comment

loved this poem it was really adorable and relatable to others. Many men and women have gone through this because they want to make their relationships work, even if they have to find the person that they love within the outer shell. I wanted to shed a tear because of the last two lines, those two lines tell something so bittersweet and loving. A beautiful love poem, and vent. Really stunning as all this poet's poems are!

- Moria Bella Bair -

Judging Comment

When a relationship goes sour, sometimes the true strength of one can overcome defeat and bring the two back to life.

Very moving and touching poem by Meme- Her word display is elegant and graceful... very pretty poem!