This poem has such good potential, the meaning and wording is great, but I would advise changing the layout, and fixing the punctuation errors for your readers to make sense of the poem better.

Wow, this is such a great piece. Full of emotion, the wording is just perfect and I love the line "Like teardrop needles in my spine." You have obviously had a chance to play with this since Saffie commented because I found it flowed beautifully.

Well written, miss. :)

The word play is great in this one.

Fantastically written and wonderful imagery

Em