Genesis

by Sincuna   May 2, 2015


Being vain, as you often should, you asked for my first impression.
And I know better not to be sweet around you,
stale and bitter as you are.
But how else can I describe it?

Time did not stop.
There was no eerie orchestra fading in
to the tune of my heartstrings, nor was there
any scent of flowers from hidden springs.
Only the voice of our crazy professor
ranting about Descartes; while proving to us
that we, at that very moment, exist.

This brought fire to your cave; as I saw you
in the corner, hiding behind your bouquet of hair
like a shy animal nestled into her own musings. And
I just sat marveling your smile, my eyes
fastened to you like a mountaineer
climbing between the rocky edges;
tempted to either leap
or stay stranded forever,
imploring the view.

I was never the audacious hero,
to pluck the thorny roses off of your feet.
To be honest, I never intended to survive you.
You just seemed so fragile, so innocent and
majestic, that to simply touch you in my dreams
would be enough to tremble your planet
and thrust you out of your orbit
until we are both misplaced in the universe.

And this is my greatest sin:
to ignore your broken little pieces, scattered
as if they wouldn't fit parts of me.
(It's no secret that they do)

Then we walked down
the stairway together, exchanging glances
amidst the narrow walls; as I wished
that time would stop,
like a heart out of breath,
and that the steps
were endless.

Please trust me when I say...
that it was a lasting impression.
I'm still lost in the world of your eyes.

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  • 9 years ago

    by GB

    Weekly Contest May 11th
    Judging comment:

    It's the genesis of love in a romantic, purely metaphoric language. From a state of denying emotions the poet slowly shifted to describing a state of growing love. I think the structure could have been better for the random length of the lines was a bit interrupting at some points. Beautiful employment of similes and metaphors despite the excessive use.

  • 9 years ago

    by -Choke-On-MY-Halo-

    Judging Comment

    I found this poem very well written, and it was touching to read from the first beginning line to the last sentence. It was elegant and yet simple. The story being told was visual and emotional giving a scene that people could relate to. It was nice to read a poem like this on a semi-cold day!

    - Moria Bella Bair 0

  • 9 years ago

    by Mahal Ko Kuya Ko

    Ansarap basa-basahin.. Haha. 'Di ako maka-move on kay Descartes. Haha.

    This is now my most favorite poem EVER! XD HAHA. I just love everything about this.

    --- MKKK

  • 9 years ago

    by Mahal Ko Kuya Ko

    Kuya Justin!! Haha. Wala lang po.

    Anyways, this was really great! Wow! Just wow! Every scene was described perfectly, from the little nuances to the professor ranting. And the reference of Descartes was just awesome. The title is somewhat thought provoking, and how you wereable to extend your hands to the readers through it was just simply great. I like how you took a scene and wove an story out of it effortlessly. The speaker maybe made a impulsive decision that he somehow was regretting, he ignored what his heart is saying and listened to his mind. He tried to deny everything, but he couldn't just hold it in. The progress of the story, from the first impression that you don't want to give her to the conclusion that she really got you from that first impression was lovely. The budding romance, and the blossoming attraction from one another, that was there from the stary but denied, is the genesis in this poem, or it could also be the first impression. It is now or never somehow. Interesting piece. Very lovely! Am definitely in love with this! Will also nominate on Monday if no one else does. Added to favorites (:

    PS. Tibay mo talaga, Kuya Justin!

    --- MKKK

  • 9 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    This is one of the better poems I have read lately on the site. Though this was heavy in metaphor, I think it worked well to distinguish its meaning. I think this in turn could be from the quote " don't judge a book by its cover" and that I love. Here you describe the beauty you see in this person, and it is interesting. The first stanza tells me that though this person is sad, you don't care at all. and you are also saying that you are just a normal person living life the way you want. anyways I will nominate this one Monday if no one else does. One of the best I have read. if I added poems to my favorite I would here. 5/5

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