At The Beginning

Wow. I have rarely read so much power in so few lines. Saffie, this is a wonderful little write. Each line is uniquely powerful. Superb!

Considering I find very short poems difficult to like, this is beautifully crafted. Superb, simple imagery that says everything about love, need and a simple wish to be able to start again! I love it! Just one option for change. I do understand the use of 'emerged' but think it would sound and read better as 'merged'! Alternately, you could write it as 'emerged as us'.

Another excellent poem, with short lines that pull the reader in well. The first line tells me a lot, which is great for such a short poem. The first line honestly tells me that, you love a friend or another person that has been in your life, and for some reason you have lost them. The other two lines do well to enhance the first line in my opinion. They tell me that you have grown for the better and in your heart you still love this person and want them, but you will tell them to come back, you are saying that if they want to come back you will be right there waiting for them with your heart open. 5/5