Once Monday comes I'm going to nominate this piece because it's too strong not to have a chance to be seen by many. |
by Beautiful Soul
Like Mori has said this poem is great, wow. It is a wonder how people can write such small lines yet put so much meaning and imagery in them. This seems to be about a timeframe about life, going from 5 years old to 20 years old. But in between it all there is a lot of pain that you have went through. I love here how you tell a story through each stanza and really they could be formed into their own poem. The imagery here you show the reader how you were feeling in each part. That to me makes this poem brilliant, and the way you don't have to use metaphor until the end, and even then it is not a lot. You have so much meaning throughout this. wonderful write. 5/5 |
by Linda
The five year old is more of the internalized child the speaker is feeling. She's twenty, but doesn't feel like she's grown, because she's vulnerable. Thanks! |
by Baby Rainbow
Do you know what - there are many people in this world who will read this and not truly understand what its real meaning is.... and then there are many people who will know exactly what you mean, and will feel comforted that they are not the only one going through this, and also relieved that you have worded it so clearly in a way they would struggle to express. |
by Meena Krish
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by Ben Pickard
You really are a very clever writer. You are able to do so much with so little - you don't waste any space in your work. |