Comments : I still think you're beautiful

  • 9 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    Nominated I loved the details here!!! Wow!

  • 9 years ago

    by Liz

    Good to see you're back!

    I also love the details and the story you told.. worth the read in the end.

  • 9 years ago

    by GB

    ~believe me id do it
    > believe me I'd do it

    ~id be running
    >I'd be running

    ~Cause i'm 2 steps from
    >Cause I'm two steps from

    ~Do you know what its like to be afraid to blink. Afraid of the image you see
    >Do you know what its like to be afraid to blink, afraid of the image you see?

    I'm not obsessed with perfection, but it's a great read that needs slights editing, thanks for sharing.

    • 9 years ago

      by The Poetic Child

      Thank you very much!

      and Yeah I definitely do need to work better on my editing skills, but because I've recently started doing Spoken word/Slam poetry, I don't focus on editing like I used to, I just focus more on memorization. But thank you for reiterating that to me! I appreciate the advice!

  • 9 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Very, very good

  • 9 years ago

    by -Choke-On-MY-Halo-

    I enjoyed it very much it was beautiful to read and really emotional. I think every person has gone through this in one time or another in their lives I've gone through it but not to that extent lol. Beautiful read and like GB said grammar is of the essence to make the poem stand out more for it's beauty that for its faults.

    - Moria Bella -

    • 9 years ago

      by The Poetic Child

      Thank you for your kind words and advice. I appreciate it!

  • 9 years ago

    by Ross Kilbride

    Nice one. You really know how to write.