I love this, it creates a vivid scene that really does suck you into the story well. First this off a creepy feeling, by the title alone, but we each have different nightmares that we feel. so you could say this is personal but it has deep metaphors and imagery as well. Thoughts seem to be swirling inside and out inside and out, each nightmare comes to the next. I love how each stanza here can be or IS its own scene. This is a story and people might say it doesn't make sense but it does in a way. Eambling or not this poem is excellent. 5/5

Woah, the last stanza.

All I can picture is someone doing this at some slam poetry thing. It is a small bar, couple of tables surrounding a small stage. A dimly lit room and a light directly over the stage. Some late 20s/early 30s hispter doing this poem and getting so worked up and jnto it then he gets to the last stanza. Pauses, says it in a low voice. Doesnt thank the crowd and just walks off the stage for dramatic effect and the crowd snaps furiously, praising his awesomeness.

Anyway, I loved it.

Weekly contest June 14th
Judging comment:

Interesting dark writing, the writer employed the metaphor excellently in many places, making the piece intense, resonant and very dynamic. The essence of the poem could refer to depression, frustration, boredom ... So much feelings expressed in perfect wording and last stanza was more than suitable as an end for such vent. Very enjoyable.