Comments : Universe.

  • 9 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    "And flowers grew in her belly" - wonderful line and great write.

  • 9 years ago

    by Meme

    Amazing piece hon. The metaphors are spot on!

  • 9 years ago

    by DarkLight

    Beautiful Amazing Sweet. yet sad.

  • 9 years ago

    by -Choke-On-MY-Halo-

    Congratulations! :)

  • 9 years ago

    by JaneDoeWrites

    This is such a well-deserved win and one of the best ones to come across on the front page in weeks. I immediately favorited this <3 fantastically penned girl!

  • 9 years ago

    by -Choke-On-MY-Halo-

    Judging Comment

    This poet created something that I've never seen before, it was not only creative, it was gorgeous from the beginning line to the last one, the metaphors took me in extreme happiness it was just a great read.

  • 9 years ago

    by H. Elizabeth

    Wow! This was really unexpected. Thank you to everyone for these comments. I really almost started crying this made me so happy. I wish I could explain my gratitude. <3

  • 9 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Powerful, emotive write. I can't shake the feeling of that first line, it seems to be embedded in my memory now. Almost seems like this girl had dreamed and longed for somewhere greater, somewhere far beyond Earth and its sorrows. There's such a chilling presence from "him" and a sadness, that now she can be free almost, free from him? Like she felt she had to die to rid her earthly body of him. I liked the idea of flowers growing in her belly, too. Something abstract yet incredible about that.

    I'm kind of left breathless at the end, because of the pain this girl was in, the way she chose to end her life, the way she wanted a home. Clarity. Heartbreaking that it had to end that way.

    Congratulations on the win, by the way. Keep writing and sharing with us.

    • 9 years ago

      by H. Elizabeth

      Wow, thank you so much. This comment means so much to me.
      "Like she had to die to rid her earthly body of him".
      Spot on. I didn't even have those words until you said them just now. But that is exactly what I meant.
      Thank you.

  • 9 years ago

    by The Poet Behind The Poems

    This was very deep deeper than the words say.
    Loved the title fitted really well, the beauty of nature really added to this piece. Outstanding

  • 7 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Another breath taking piece and very well deserved win definitely has the wow factor