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by -Choke-On-MY-Halo-
Second line since it's present tense it should be "kisses". Fourth line again it's supposed to be going with the flow should be "suffers". After "dream" on the fifth line I think ";" would be nice. Otherwise than those corrections this is a very sweet short poem. It's very loving and yet blunt on its own. Great read. 5/5 - Moria Bella Knight -
by DarkLight
Always happy to learn from others. Thank you.