Comments : Confession

  • 9 years ago

    by -Choke-On-MY-Halo-

    Since you said you wanted criticisms I will give them to you since I normally don't.

    First line "lord" should be "Lord" since you're talking about God for both stanzas, besides that I saw nothing wrong with the poem.

    The poem itself is interesting to read honestly, it flowed just nicely and keeps someone on their toes. It made me laugh in certain parts but that's cause I have a dark heart.

    I think is poem overall was talking about how humanity truly is and if I'm way off forgive me, but this sounds offly like humanity's nature and mannerisms. Either way nice write 5/5

    - Moria Bella Knight -

    • 9 years ago

      by DarkLight

      Thank you Bella Knight.
      Sorry I don't wanna sound rude, the word "lord" here does not meant "God" it's just plain. "lord" like boss...
      I appreciate your critique. Thanks alot.