Comments : Moving On

  • 9 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    HI and welcome to PnQ!

    I really liked your poem, you have an nice control over language and your rhyming meter is nice and controlled, I have to say that....

    "They come nonstop, I cannot drop
    These memories that I hold.
    Of you, of me, what we used to be,
    Those special times of old!"

    ^^^^^^ This I REALLY like :)

    Nice poem and one that used descriptive writing very well my only minor critisism would be to kill off the Capitals at the beginning of each line, unless its after a period or its a name etc - I hope you dont mind the critique but it detracts from this impressive write.

    5/5

    • 9 years ago

      by M Nioni

      I appreciate criticism. It helps me to improve myself.
      Thank you for taking the time to share your opinion. :)

  • 9 years ago

    by DarkLight

    I guess I can rate to that. I love your piece.
    please feel welcome in P&Q. where great mind share their thoughts and feelings without fear of being judged.

    • 9 years ago

      by M Nioni

      I hope I will feel welcome.
      I tried to write at least one piece that many people can relate to.

  • 9 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Very strong first poem on this site - welcome to the site and to Rainbow Writers

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    This is absolutely stunning. Wow!!!
    Em