Hi Meme,

I love the layout of this poem. The image of a kite and what it represents. A love that is unrequited perhaps?

Great piece with measured suspense and anticipation.

Silence can mean so much!

Good work.

Michael

I'm not really sure what to say about this piece. I loved it, sounded quite well as I read, but the words escape my reach blocking away my understanding of what is happening.

My guess, is you talking of a broken heart either from depart or so.

In wonderment
he strayed, so
far the clouds
became his
second home
or perhaps
his only!

In this stanza is where I get the idea of that.

Again it's only my guess.

The sun slapped
her eyes shut
every time her
chin aimed high.
.
this part I liked it more.
The personification of sun slappinv her eyes shut was really good.

That is my thought if wrong would be happy know. If right well and good. I like the lay out and the flow made me read through many times before deciding to comment.

Thanks for the beautiful and well done write.

Umm..my limited understanding of a kid tells me, you're comparing one lover to a kite. A slight thread (bond) that holds them together. But fear that a strong gust of wind ( some event) or if that bond slips away from her hold it might break that bond/string and he might drift away to some place far away. And she struggles to hold it tight. ? t's beautiful. (But lil kid can't grasp much of it)