Comments : That moment

  • 9 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hi,

    I like the format you have chosen. It allows this reader to fully absorb the words and their meaning. The moons power likened to a feeling of love pulling at 'heart strings' is a good one and one that we can all relate to. Then there is the ignition of love, that first kiss where it is all cemented. Finally, Leaving the reader with hope you the future. A nice feeling of optimism.

    Good all round write.

    Well done,

    Michael

    • 9 years ago

      by Matthew Alexander

      Thank you so much for the kind words. I appreciate the feedback :)

  • 9 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Wonderful poem. I love the first two and last two lines - brilliant bookends to a lovely piece.

  • 9 years ago

    by Euphanasia

    Dope writing style

    • 9 years ago

      by Matthew Alexander

      Thanks a lot I really appreciate that. Thank you for all of your comments!

  • 9 years ago

    by Lauren

    Wow I could literally feel the emotion pouring into me. I could feel the moment and picture myself there it was truly amazing. Thank you for this.

    • 9 years ago

      by Matthew Alexander

      You are welcome! And thank you :) I wrote it with the feeling of the first kiss of my gf and I. So a lot of emotion was put into it

  • 9 years ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    I live your poem.. especially the opening lines. A beautiful sincere write... staight from the heart that touches the heart! :-)
    Well done

  • 9 years ago

    by Lauren

    Excellent job!! I loved it, it truly touched me!

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    This is absolutely beautiful.

  • 7 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    OMG, this is so heart melting...made me feel squishy squashy :-)