Comments : Bird table 2 (Haiku)

  • 9 years ago

    by Hellon

    This was such a lovely picture you painted here and...it's nice to think you put crumbs out for the birds. I also do this but..the bandicoots usually beat them to it. Image of bandicoot if you're curious...

    https://www.google.com.au/search?q=bandicoot&biw=1778&bih=861&tbm=isch&tbo=u&source=univ&sa=X&ved=0CCUQsARqFQoTCMnts8n7iccCFUIlpgodFB4GuA&dpr=0.9

    I also liked the idea of family mayhem...sounded very similar to having lunch with some of my grandchildren today haha!!!

  • 9 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Perfect, Michael:)

    It has the twist that makes a Haiku so precious and all words are well placed and chosen with so much care. Could envisage this, especially on this sunny Sunday morning in the midst of summer here in Holland!

    I like to write without capitals and punctuation, especially in such small poems as these. Let me show you how your poem would look like then:

    Starlings squabble on
    a table full of toast crumbs
    family mayhem.

    Somehow is seems more beautiful like this:)

    Very happy with your return!

    Take care,

    Ingrid x

  • 9 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Another lovely piece. "Family mayhem" conjures all sorts of lovely images. Feeding our own children seems often to end this way! A perfect end with an element of amusement (for me anyway)