Comments : Pills In My Palm

  • 9 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    A stunning write, Saffie. At first I wasn't sure about the repetition of "mouth" on lines 5 and 6 but after a few reads, it works really well. Very powerful

    • 9 years ago

      by Baby Rainbow

      Thank you for pointing that out - I went back to the original line of throat.