by Dancing Rivers Aug 13, 2015
category :
Sadness, depression /
grieving, loss
It's been four weeks, since we last did speak |
by Baby Rainbow
On the lapa floor, trying to my pain ignore. |
by BlueJay
I think you did very well in making your point and in conveying your pain, but your use of syntax (verb and noun misplaced) could be reworked to make the flow/rhyme scheme a little more smooth. |