Heaven & Hell

Judging comment:

This is beautiful. I found this to be a wonderful poem full of contradicting feelings- the heat she feels is mixed with darkness (blackened lines). This makes me think its something she yearns for despite knowing that she probably shouldn't and that it's wrong.

I particularly enjoyed the use of her demons burning along with her soul and his lips. So often we place our demons within our soul and state that's where they came from so to see them placed separately was new and refreshing. Mentioning his lips here adds again to the fact that what he is giving is no good.

"and he consumed her as if she had starved him," I love this. It's a beautiful follow on from the above and again enforces the fact that this person is no good, that he is slowly devouring her inside and out, which is nicely wrapped up with the closing lines.

I found this piece to be very alluring and wonderfully written.

This is outstanding...ugh.....awesome writing just beautiful.

Beautiful!