Wonderful write :) i really like the honesty you display here (something which i can relate to) i love your word choice and again how you set this out....i read it a number of times in my head and out loud and i am torn....on one hand i love the lack of punctuation when reading out loud you dont wanna take a breath so younjust keep going.... but on the other hand some punctuation may control the reader a bit better...only my opinion but i guess it depends how you wish for the reader to take it...i also love that you're a rhymer too! 5/5