Comments : 2:41 a.m.

  • 9 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello,

    Insomnia is like another world. It reminds me of when I worked nights. I felt like I was the only person awake, looking out for those asleep.

    I am not sure if the ghost's intentions are good or not. Dreaming, haunted men scream - is this because of outstretched hand or another ghost?

    Lovely imagery and language that provokes the mind, teasing it, willing it to deduce the meaning.

    Well done,

    Michael

    • 9 years ago

      by Meme

      Thank you for the comment!

  • 9 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    A wonderfully written piece. "Let me be a resident ghost in your mind" - I love that line.
    Well done.

    • 9 years ago

      by Meme

      Thanks Ben

  • 9 years ago

    by Britt

    Sometimes there are lines in a poem that really stick out more so than others and strike me -- this line is one of them:

    Because dreaming men are haunted
    men, dream of me tonight.

    I -love- that so much. I've read it over and over and can't get over it. It's haunting, beautiful, sad..

    Your opening stanza is probably my favorite. It's something I can relate to, yet something so personal, like a secret. I think it's interesting you opened with this person never sleeps, and you end with asking them to dream of you. Like to take a chance, rest in you, be still, be calm. That's a really beautiful and heartbreaking thought. Lovely poem!

    • 9 years ago

      by Meme

      That was my favorite line too!
      Thanks for the comment hon :)