Comments : A Writers Prayer

  • 9 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Cassie,
    I'm sorry to hear about your troubles - there always seems to be one (or two!) doesn't there?
    All I can say is that if your short stories are anywhere near as graceful, elegant and naturally written as your poetry, you can rest assured that that particular troll can be dismissed as an ignorant idiot.
    All the very best, take care, and for God's sake, woman - keep writing!
    Ben

  • 9 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello Cassie,

    This poem is obviously heart felt. As writers we labor over words and phrases and try our best to deliver a message and hopefully leave the reader feeling the emotion we intended. Those people who think they can callously slander are as Ben aptly states 'idiots'.

    As for this poem...

    The title, 'A writer's Prayer' is a title we can all relate to. We post and hope for acceptance from our peers and hopefully friends.

    If I should open up my heart
    ^
    The reticence is clear here in the word 'If'. It reminds me of the phrase, once bitten twice shy. My answer is, yes, of course post and believe the people you trust.

    and mind within these words,
    I beg you treat them
    as you would your own.
    ^
    Like a mother handing over her precious new born. Respect words as they are part of the poet.

    Each tiny stroke, each careful
    phrase has birthed in waves of love,
    ^
    This is beautifully penned. The words, Tiny and birthed are baby like description, a verb some might say... The waves create a rhythm in the words, like a beach being washed gently, but nevertheless insistently.

    released unto your
    care they then have flown.
    ^
    Once posted, it is time for a deep breath...
    Like fledglings leaping from the nest, they then have flown.

    You may not think them worthy of
    a place in hallowed halls,
    but dear to me they
    ever shall remain.
    ^
    We are all learning here. If we were professional writers would we dare post our livelihood on a site for other people to plagiarise? No, we do this because we love language and sharing our passion with like minded people.

    So please, before you shoot them down
    Look inwards to your soul,
    lest someone else do
    unto you the same.
    ^
    The Golden Rule or ethic of reciprocity is a maxim, ethical code or morality that essentially states either of the following:

    One should treat others as one would like others to treat oneself

    One should not treat others in ways that one would not like to be treated.

    This concept describes a "reciprocal", or "two-way", relationship between one's self and others that involves both sides equally, and in a mutual fashion.
    ^
    https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Golden_Rule

    Cassie, you have conveyed your thought and feeling concisely and may I say it, poetically.

    Well done and keep on keeping on.

    Take care,

    Michael ((hugs))

  • 9 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    This is a very poetic poem you have written here Cassie! True emotion flows from this piece, The wording is excellent. 5/5 :)

  • 9 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Very meaningful words Cassie and I think you have expressed this honestly and bluntly.

    Your title is missing the apostrophe in Writer's.

    But great write, lots of meaning in a short poem.