Excellent piece - and a form I admit to have known nothing about so thanks for sharing.
Take care and all the best
Ben

Dear Samia,

This is really deep. I love the format!

The first Crystalline hits home as the longer you are alive, the more memories you gather and melancholic feelings often overwhelm me when I look at pictures of when my son was still a child, as also other things I have left as tokens of people who left or died, like my papa.

The second one is so short to cover yet so much, dementia...what a horrible condition, yet so many suffer of it.

You really made each syllable count, dear, so well done!

All the best, Ingrid xx

Love this write! so simplistic in nature but full of imagery, ive never tried this form before so ill think ill have to have a go at this.

Great write :)

First off thanks for sharing this form which I did not know about and secondly the poem itself delivers a strong message without saying too much!

The image in the first two lines just pulls the heart to those unforgettable feelings and the tears accompanied with it. The first half is focused on "she" while the second on "he" so you have penned two sides of a coin so to speak with a very heartfelt sadness...nicely done.

I dont think any of the commenters understood the depth of your poem.. Maybe is because I want to believe that you deliberately used
~she~ and ~he~ trying to remember what used to be....