Hello Koan,

this is simply breathtaking...

I love the format, the intense imagery, for example: inviting my immobile waxen flesh
for a last shivering dance.
^
Here we have the smooth 'nubile' body, cold and elegant, moving like a ballerina, long slender limbs outstretched moving like music through the scene.

Wonderful!

Take care,

Michael

I love the presentation and most everything about this poem

This really is an exquisite piece of poetry - well done and all the very best,
Ben

Hello Koan,

congratulations, this struck me as a winner after my first reading.

Well done.

Michael

Yes, well done on the win, Koan - thoroughly deserved.

Always have admired your unique style of writing... It's graceful, elegant and truly breathtaking... Well deserved... Made me smile to see this on the front page.

Heartbreaking piece this is.... So damn beautiful!

Judging Comment:

The melancholy tone in this write just pulls the
reader along with the writer making her feel what
the writer feels. The choice of words used brings
out the emotions and images alive and it captures
the reader's heart. Its so beautifully intense but
passionately sad and the layout of the poem
gives a lasting impact like it reaches out to the
reader. It also gave me the image of the ocean/sea
who can't touch his love but can only look and
yearn from afar. I adore this...beautifully sad.

Wow... this is absolutely a heart-gripping write. Beautifully written.

Wonderful Write!!!!

That was an emotional read. Hope your doing ok.