Comments : Fatigue the 2nd

  • 9 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Brilliant piece with a great flow and a really strong last stanza which all poems in this format should have in my opinion.

  • 9 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Love the conversation style of this poem, and how you are speaking to the Fatigue as a person, really makes the poem interesting and different.

    I think it is worded well, good flow, and I like how you give a bit of history too, that you have known this "friend" before, and it implies that perhaps things got better for a while, but have now returned to how they were before, which is always sad in this type of case.

    I think the ending is realistic, that all you really can do is hope that there is a brighter day ahead, although inside you do not feel it, you do not feel hopeful at all, and you don't even want to believe in the light anymore.

    Good write.