Some poems I read just seem to ooze great lines, which sometimes strike me more than the content (my fault - I can't multitask)! But on first read, that's what struck me about this piece. Just a couple of examples:
"and before tomorrow closes its eyes" and "....leaves my cold heart sinking in the river". Two highly effective lines that moved me as I was reading.
All the best Saffie and well done on this piece,
Ben