Sunshine Strength

Beautiful poem, Saffie; magical, positive, uplifting and full of hope; the type of poem that anyone would like to see written about themselves. Your skilful use of language; your expression of emotion, show how special this person is to you and clearly describe the effect they have on you, and I agree that they must be a very special person to be able to lift you in this way. So I am full of admiration and envy for them and their ability to make you feel 'in the sunshine'. Love this poem, Saffie!

Hi Saffie. I am going to read this through stanza by stanza and comment as I go.

The first stanza is an almost confusing read - but in a good way. You end up not knowing whether to be happy or sad at the end. The fact that the writer has a reason to hold on and "walk in the sun" is fine, but the fact that they seem to NEED these things in order to protect them from the "Autumn sky" is not quite so positive perhaps.

The second stanza reinforces the above: There is metaphorical sunshine in the writer's life, but only because of this person who, again, they seem to need as they are the ones "persuading" the writer of their worth.

And then, stanza three, the first real pouring out of romantic love for this person. "There is a sparkle in your eyes....creating a rainbow inside my world".
Images of light shining through the dark. Lovely piece of writing, this stanza.

Then, in conclusion, an acknowledgment of the need and love for this person who has come along and given sunshine where before there was none.

A wonderful piece, Saffie, filled with sadness but hope as well.
All the best,
Ben